[GreenGuy]

A bunch of stuff I wrote.

This post has been edited by GreenGuy: 13 January 2008 - 04:59 AM

[GreenGuy]

Never again will I soothe someone's pain.
Never again will I believe it's happening.
Never again will I tell my true feelings.
Never again will I confess my desires.
Never again will I trust I am the only one.
Never again will I let my heart be broken.

[GreenGuy]

I'm sick of giving.
I'm sick of caring.
I'm sick of hoping.
I'm sick of wishing.
I'm sick of dreaming.
I'm sick of the future.
I'm sick of being the friend.
I'm sick of being walked all over.
I'm sick!

[GreenGuy]

I wish you never told me you liked me.
I wish I never told you I liked you too.
I wish you never asked me what I've always wanted.
I wish I never answered 'a girlfriend'.
I wish I would have listened to my friends.
...

[GreenGuy]

Blue flames oh so pretty. How dangerous you are yet you warm us with your glow.
A glass barrier is all that holds you back. What would happen if your master cracked?
A burning flame, a smell of chaos, the ever-present heat of old. Element of fire you are great and mighty.
Unnaturally blue in your metal prison. Doom to all that try to hold you unguarded.
Yet easily defeated when small and alone. Water is your enemy, wind is an ally but only when you are large and strong.
Goodbye tiny blue flame. A wind from their lips has extinguished thou.

[GreenGuy]

I no longer care.
Go and be happy with your man.
I don't see what he does for you.
You cannot hold him when you are sad.
If the distance works for you then by all means.
I'm sorry I tried so hard to be what I thought you needed.
I can't be there because I'm in your way.
It might hurt but I must let you go.
I can see now how stupid I was.
Just do whatever you fancy.

[GreenGuy]

Ok that's it...
I had some problems posting it in rapid succession.
Must be some anti-spam thing.

[jaded_blue]

Heartfelt Greeny.

Blue

[GreenGuy]

Thanks Blue.
I probably should stop writing these now.
After all, no one likes a whiner.

[enigmawing]

GreenGuy, on Jan 18 2008, 05:31 PM, said:

After all, no one likes a whiner.

Sometimes we need to Green. . . feels familiar actually.

And like Blue said, very heartfelt.

[jaded_blue]

Greeny if it's your way of release and you want to share. We'll be reading. Some people just don't know what to say to emotional pain.

Blueeeeeeee

[Grey Linys]

GreenGuy, on Jan 12 2008, 11:06 PM, said:

I no longer care.
Go and be happy with your man.
I don't see what he does for you.
You cannot hold him when you are sad.
If the distance works for you then by all means.
I'm sorry I tried so hard to be what I thought you needed.
I can't be there because I'm in your way.
It might hurt but I must let you go.
I can see now how stupid I was.
Just do whatever you fancy.

I in particularly like the last line of this poem for its contrast value. "Just do whatever you fancy." I like that

Your poetry is well written in the emotional context, lines that I can almost emphasize with because of the repetition and straight-forwardness. You should experiment with multiple stanzas, using repetition in a parallel structure to create a rhythm of sorts (much like how musical lyrics are pieced together).

For me, it's always nice to read poems, regardless of it subject or "whininess".

I'd love to see more of your poems GreenGuy

[GreenGuy]

Linys, on Jan 25 2008, 07:23 PM, said:

Your poetry is well written in the emotional context, lines that I can almost emphasize with because of the repetition and straight-forwardness. You should experiment with multiple stanzas, using repetition in a parallel structure to create a rhythm of sorts (much like how musical lyrics are pieced together).

Ah yes but that would take thought and skill which I clearly do not have.


I am incapable of love.
I don't feel anything.
I'm not even sad.
And I'm not happy.
Nothing does anything for me anymore.
I can no longer live with myself.
There is a giant wound in my chest.
The blood is black and cold.
Forget me...
I am nothing now.
I was always nothing to you.
Why did I believe I could be special?
Sadly it's too late.
For even if you said you loved me.
It wouldn't matter because
I am incapable of love.

[GreenGuy]

I am a loser. That is fact.
If it wasn't true I wouldn't be alone.
I want you, but I can't have you.
Fuck you all. There's nothing for me now.
There's something wrong with me on the inside.
I hate this feeling. I hate what I've done.
I cared too much and I got nothing in return.
How much longer will I be this way?
Please someone tell me it will be ok.

[jaded_blue]

Gives me an emo feeling. Nice flood of sentences, you got your flow down Greeny. I'll be watching for new ones. Thanks for sharing.

Blue