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Posted 09 April 2006 - 01:25 AM

I was reading a letter my special lady friend wrote for me one day and was reminded of the day she wrote it.  We had a huge fight the night prior and finally resolved our issue a few hours later.  After our resolution... well this is what came to me.  I hope you enjoy.

Forgiven
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Two minds think alike.
Two sides of a coin.
Two dancers defined,
By they song they employ.

It’s dark now,
No Light.
No breath on the wind.
To touch is to see,
To feel
Listen.

A moan from the soul,
A cry from the heart.
Skin pressed together,
Love torn apart.

A tear mixed with sweat ,
mixed with blood mixed with pain.
A shoulder to cry on,
To bite and to maim.

Nails cut through flesh,
Leaving trails in their wake.
Pain goes unnoticed,
More is at stake.

Control, lost control,
Morality past.
God looks on,
My name is last.

Silhouette in the starlight,
The moon's but a farce.
A mask for that starlight,
A drink for the parched.

As shadows we blend back into one.
As lovers we move forever on.


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Posted 09 April 2006 - 01:34 AM

i like it. beautiful. i hope that u have more. keep it up.  ;) ;) ;D :-*
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Posted 09 April 2006 - 02:31 AM

That is heart wrenching. :'( You are very skilled.

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Posted 09 April 2006 - 03:35 AM

HA! Sissy! ;D No really it's very good. ;)

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Posted 09 April 2006 - 04:43 AM

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HA! Sissy! ;D No really it's very good. ;)


LOL!  I have no idea what you are talking about... Now if you don't mind, i need to get back to the game.  yeah, football!  Beer!  Mmmmmmm.
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Posted 09 April 2006 - 06:30 AM

LOL! ;D ;D ;D

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Posted 09 April 2006 - 04:33 PM

Beautiful poem, Scribs. Thanks. :)
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Posted 09 April 2006 - 09:01 PM

Wonderfully written! ;)

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Posted 19 April 2006 - 08:47 AM

hay i want more damit lol. just take your time it will come to u
i know. ;)

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Posted 19 April 2006 - 12:40 PM

thanks Piaz.  I do have a new one titled 'falling from harmony'.  You might like it...

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Posted 30 April 2006 - 05:27 PM

your amazing! ;)

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