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Posted 17 December 2011 - 08:05 AM

Hey guys, I know it's been awhile

So a few months back I had a story all ready for the contest but wasn't able to partner up with anyone, I said I would post the story after the contest ended, so here goes, enjoy.



Interior car nighttime
George is driving around eyes blood shot
Thought bubble of George and Phil smoking mega joint back at frat house
Phil: Hey George, why don’t you get us a pizza
George: Yeah, a pizza
George grabs keys to new car college just bought him (red sports car)
George passes one food place after another getting increasingly hungry, passes 3 pizza places forgetting his mission
Sees bright sign for “Whoflung Puu’s All-Nite Chinese Buffet”
George pulls into parking lot drooling
Enters buffet to see cute young asian hostess arguing with her father Whoflung Puu
Mai: But daddy Im 18 now
Who: I duhn care, hep family, marry Tong
Who points at picture of employee of the month which is Tong, Tong is skinny pimply asain nerd with thick black rim glasses next to eom pic is pic of Puu family with Whoflung, his wife Maika, oldest daughter Mai, and twin younger daughters Taika and Liaka
(two many Ks, need better sounding names but I like the Puu joke)
optional-(bonus joke pic of Ho family from MHAN)
Who pointing at Ho family pic: Now be more like cousin Wong and honor you father!-optional
Who walks through door into kitchen back offices what have you
Mai notices George standing there
Mai: Oh very sorry sir, let me seat you immediately
Mai reaches for menus
Mai: did you need menu or just buffet
George (in weed haze):whaaa, oh, just buffet
Mai shows George to his table and places napkin and chopstick in front of him
Mai: Your familiar, have you been here before
George: No, don’t think so
Mai (eyes go wide as she realizes he was in paper turning down multimillion dollar contract to play for Jabville Rammers pro football team)
Mai: I know you, you play football
George (slightly embarrassed and stoned and hungry blushes a bit): Yeah thats me
Mai: Cool, well enjoy your meal
Slightly plump waitress comes over to get George’s drink order, like most asian restaurants the staff is all Asian
Waitress catches George staring at her ample cleavage
Waitress: Sir plates are at da bar, hep yoself
Restaurant is empty except for George and the 2 waitresses and one other customer sitting in a back both with headphones on (Jabville cameo appearance opportunity)
George sees buffet and begins to pile his plate full, even stops to eat things directly off the bar, eggrolls look rather phallic in his altered state
Who in office sees George on video camera and freaks out because of Georges size and worry about running out of food
Who busting through door glaring at Mai
Who: What he doing here?
Mai: Eating, he’s a customer
Who: I told you no big boys, they eat too much
Mai looking crestfallen at upsetting her father
Mai: But daddy…
George is on his way back from his second trip to the buffet, his plate is piled with shrimp and noodles in the background we can see Who yelling quietly at Mai about respect and family honor and George might ruin business
Back to Mai and Who
Mai: Daddy he is big football star
Mai shows Who the newspaper cover with a picture of George and the story about turning down the contract and a picture of George in his new sports car
Who gets dollar signs in his eyes and thinks endorsement deal with George promoting his buffet
Who: OK, but you charge him triple for all food he eat
Mai: Yes daddy
Who: and talk him into coming back, do whatever it takes
George at the buffet the waitress is restocking a pan that George has emptied while George is filling his plate from another bin, sees waitress bending over bar her short skirt hiking up to expose lose thong
George drops to knees behind her and begins to lick her dumplings
Waitress is shocked to feel tongue on her nether regions, begins to freak out but George is doing such a good job she doesn’t stop him
Other waitress walks in and is surprised to see George getting his fill of the all you can eat waitress
Georges waitress has freed her breast from their top and is tweaking her nipple, her hand is in a batch of sesame chicken since she is trying to keep her balance while George roughly eats her and begins to finger her puss
In his weed haze George picks waitress up and takes her back to his table where he lays her down and sits back in his chair and continues eating her pussy, reaches down and frees his enormous erect cock and jerk off
Free waitress goes to get Mai from up front to report the sexual activity
Mai and waitress return to dining room to see waitress in orgasm on Georges table and Georges cock, both are immediately impressed
Waitress 2 ask Mai what should they do, Mai remember Who telling her to get him to come back and see way to get revenge on her father for being mean to her
Mai: We must honor my father wishes
Waitress looks confused as Mai grabs her wrist and drags her towards Georges table
Mai drops to her knees in front of George bringing waitress 2 down with her and starts licking and kissing Georges cock waitress 2 follows suit and does the same
Waitress 1 still on table recovering from orgasm George picks up eggroll dips it in waitress 1 slit and eats it
Mai tries to wrap her lips around Georges girth but her mouth is to small, waitress 2 winks at her and takes Georges cock balls deep down her throat
Waitress 2: I learn dis in hong kong when I work for whore house
Inhales Georges cock again and tongues his balls
George now in a sex craze grabs Mai and lays her on top of waitress 1, ripping her dress open and panties off he begins to eat her out
Mai: Oh.. oh my… oh goooohd!
(at this point do whatever kinky ribald sexy stuff you feel George can get away with these 3, keep in mind other customer in restaurant oblivious to the sex since they are listening to headphones turned up to loud to hear)
(maybe another shot of Who in his office thinking of the money to be made off George as the video screens behind him show George doing weird twisted things to his daughter)
George finally blows his load all over all three girls giving them a cum buffet which they eagerly lick and slurp off each other
George pulls pants up and pulls wallet out of his pants, drops 3 twenties on the table and walks towards the door
Mai with a lusty look in her eyes: Come back any time you want football man
George is driving away as girls in restaurant start to straighten up as Who walks back in
Mai to waitress’s: I’m gonna marry that man someday
Who seeming angry of Mais comment and confused by mess on table and knocked over chairs
Who: What happened here?!
3 girls start to laugh
George driving away remembers the pizza and pulls into a Jabinoes pulls out wallet to pay and wonders where $60 went having completely forgetting the buffet
FIN
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Posted 18 December 2011 - 07:37 PM

That would be very hot to read. I hope somebody picks it up and gives it a try.
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Posted 21 December 2011 - 01:41 AM

thanks Telgar
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Posted 21 December 2011 - 01:44 AM

Great story Sickpuppy. Unfortunate that you couldn't find an artist for it... thanks for sharing though. It was well worth the effort you put into it!
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