[subarashi89]

So yea, i've been partnered up with Chip (writer currently work on JKRcomix) days ago, by marvelous JKR, BIG THANKS bro.
Team name will be Totally stranger, since Chip and i are totally stranger, fun enough eh?

i have a short stories from him, about something between papa and Rita, you know, something~ (THIS IS JAB's forum bro~ what you expect beside that? )

Right away, NOP, not right away. Right after my school hour i throw in everything to finding some direction, or some way different to depict a whole different Rita. (And of course, papa...)
but seems im kind of lackING today, bunch of them just doesn't seem right, guess im gonna continue tomorrow
So im here to throw all the stuff up~ since it's progress thread right~?

since it's a prequel, so i tried to achieve a younger version of Rita in this picture


Papa, final version~ i don't want take too much time on "SUPPORT" character~


i luv this Rita, but it seems... not naughty enough? but i fav this


ITS HORRIBLE!!! why i mix up Donald Duck with Rita !!!!??? Maybe i should try to rest awhile??


Some hentai version of Rita? but not hentai enough, i'm not any dumbass that would throw some hentai stuff on Jab's forum. Just try to let her naughty abit


Finally some full body. i try to let her look chubbier, not so curvy, shorter, and of course naughtier. since it's prequel right?


i luve the design on left, look like teen. Then i feel i should try to dig in more deeper...But NOT today !!!
Hope Chip notice this thread and give me some feedback about it
and of course comments from you guys

Oct 3,
Cheers,

This post has been edited by subarashi89: 06 October 2011 - 11:06 AM

[JKR666]

Looking good so far.

[Spaceace]

You're doing great. Keep it rollin'.

[fannum]

I'm impressed by the quick, confident style evidenced in your sketches.

Cheers, and good luck

[Marksman]

Splendid.

[Sinope!]

Wow. This is going to be awesome. I love your take on Jeb and I'm glad you kept Rita's big boobs. I hope you keep the "Daisy Dukes" rather than the overalls. I think Rita looks best in the cutoffs.

[disclaimer]

dude, i really enjoying the cartoonness of your drawing. hope to see some more stuff form you soon

cheers
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[subarashi89]

Thanks all above

TONS of assignment these days so progress have been dragged
here Cover, Pg1 and Pg2







now working on Pg3
Any comments please post it out, so i can tweak it before final

Oct 7
Cheers

[subarashi89]

Oh yea some questions here, does Rita have freckles?
I just added some cause of... well thats what i luv
if there are Anything mentioned that she Doesn't, i will shove it off
Thanks

P.S: disclaimer : why you hate photoshop so much? It's my favourite application

[JKR666]

Looking absolutely amazing. I don't think she has freckles but hey.. Why not? Darkmage and Baw ( fl's writers) would love this for sure.

Glad you did so much with Chip's script.

[Spaceace]

Very cool. And I like that you jumped right to the sex. With only 7 pages available it's a hard balance between story development and just some good ol' comic porn.


Can't wait to see more.

[Anangel]

Wow, incredible comic, a great addition to the contest.

[Zaarash]

BEAUTIFUL!

it's nice job

[Sinope!]

Fantastic Sub! Your art style, coloring matches so well with the dynamic paneling. It looks action packed just standing still.

What a gorgeous entry to the competition so far!

[GreasyMoose]

Spaceace, on 06 October 2011 - 05:17 AM, said:

Very cool. And I like that you jumped right to the sex. With only 7 pages available it's a hard balance between story development and just some good ol' comic porn.


Can't wait to see more.

That's what I'm sayin'... Great job guys!