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DRAWING/WRITING JAM: VAULT ROBBERY Von Patrick commits his first crime...

#1 User is offline   Von Patrick 

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Posted 09 June 2010 - 01:39 AM

If you don't know what this is a homage too, then your pulse is far removed from the pop culture community. :whistle:

This is just the beginning of an arc I have in mind with the plan of letting members fill in the holes inbetween....total anarchy to ensue. This is the only portion that is a direct simulation to something else. all the writing from here will be totally original.

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OVER BLACK: WORDS IN BLUE FLAME APPEAR




DRAWING JAM —PROGLUE




CUT TO:



















DAYLIGHT. Moving over the skyline of Jabville...

Closing in on an office building... On a large window...

Which SHATTERS to reveal-




INT. OFFICE, HIGH RISE -- DAY

A man in a MICHEAL MYERS mask holding a SMOKING SILENCED PISTOL

ejects a shell casing. He turns to a second

man wearing a LEATHERFACE mask, who steps forward with a

CABLE LAUNCHER, aims at a lower roof across the street and

FIRES a cable across. Micheal secures the line to an I-beam

line- CLAMP on- sends a KIT BAG out then steps OUT the

window...




EXT. HIGH-RISE -- DAY

...into space. The men SLIDE across the DIZZYING DROP...

landing on the lower roof across the street.

EXT. DOWNTOWN JABVILLE – DAY




A MAN on the corner, back to us, holding a JASON VOORHEES style HOCKEY MASK. An

SUV pulls up. The man gets in, puts on his mask. Inside the

car- two other men wearing FREDDY KRUGER AND CHUKY masks.




FREDDY

Thats all 5 in place. Let's do this.




CHUCKY

That's it? 5 lurkers?




FREDDY looks up from loading his automatic weapon.




FREDDY

There's two on the roof. Every guy

is an extra share. Five shares is

plenty.




CHUCKY

Six shares. Don't forget the guy who

planned the job.




FREDDY

Yeah? He thinks he can sit it out

and still take a slice. Thinks hes some evil genius. See how smart he is when we take off with all the drawings and sell them ourselves.




FREDDY cocks his weapon. CHUCKY pulls the car over in front of

the JAB corporate office.










EXT. ROOFTOP, JAB OFFICE -- CONTINUOUS

LEATHERFACE PRIES open an access panel-

MICHEAL

What exactly are we going to do with this shit after we steal it?

LEATHERFACE

Sell all of JABSs original artwork, unreleased or otherwise, sketches, electronic drawings, ALL OF IT. Online.

MICHEAL

And people are really going to pay for this?




LEATHERFACE pulls out thick bundles of blue CAT 5 cables.

LEATHERFACE

Jab is one of the most popular comic artists in the adult industry and word is he has thousands of his pieces stored here. His fans will pay to bootleg that shit. And the boss is gonna split the shares.




EXT. JAB COPORATE OFFICE -- CONTINUOUS

JASON, FREDDY AND CHUCKY get out of the car and march into

the office building CARRYING ASSAULT RIFLESINT.

JAB OFFICE -- DAY

The Security Guard looks up- FREDDY FIRES into the ceiling.

The members guarding the vault scream. CHUCKY CRACKS the Security Guard.




As FREDDY AND JASON round up the hostages, one of the cute female guards JADED_BLUE

presses a button mounted beneath her desk- a SILENT ALARM.










EXT. ROOFTOP -- DAY

LEATHERFACE watches the alarm PING his handheld.





LEATHERFACE

Here comes the silent alarm.

(touches a button)

And there it goes. That's funny. It

didn't dial out to 911- it was

trying to reach a private number.

Behind him, MICHEAL RAISES his silenced HANDGUN.




MICHEAL

Is it a problem?

LEATHERFACE

Naw, I'm done here.

MICHEAL SHOOTS. LEATHERFACE SLUMPS. MICHEAL picks up his bag and

FORCES OPEN the roof access door...




INT. STAIRWELL, JAB OFFICE -- DAY

...and speeds down the stairs, to the basement. He SLAMS

open the door...




INT. VAULT ROOM, JAB OFFICE -- DAY

...and comes face to face with a huge VAULT.




INT. LOBBY, JAB OFFICE -- DAY

FREDDY and CHUCKY move down the line of hostages- CHUCKY hands

each Hostage OBJECTS from a bag. A GRENADE. FREDDY follows,

PULLING THE PINS.

FREDDY

Obviously, we don't want you doing

anything with your hands other than

holding on for dear life.




BLAM. CHUCKY is BLOWN OFF HIS FEET- FREDDY AND JASON DIVE

for cover- the manager STEVE_H steps out of his office, SHOTGUN

in hand. Hostages SCRAMBLE, CLINGING their grenades...




FREDDY and JASON cower as STEVE_H FIRES again.




FREDDY

He's got three left?




JASON raises TWO fingers. FREDDY squeezes off a SHOT. Then

STEVE_H FIRES. FIRES again. FREDDY looks at JASON, who

nods. FREDDY JUMPS UP.




STEVE_H FIRES- FREDDY GRUNTS as buckshot CLIPS his

shoulder. FALLS. STEVE_H moves in for the kill,

FUMBLING for new shells. JASON STANDS- SHOOTS him.

JASON picks up the shotgun. FREDDY checks his wound- it's

superficial. He struggles to his feet.




FREDDY

Where'd you learn to count?!

JASON's mask stares him down. FREDDY heads for the stairs in

the back. JASON starts loading fresh shells into the shotgun.




STEVE_H

You have any idea who you're stealing

from? You and your friends are FUCKING DEAD!!!




JASON looks down at him. Says nothing.







INT. VAULT ROOM, JAB OFFICE -- DAY

MICHEAL at the vault door, turning the tumblers.




FREDDY walks in.




MICHEAL

I got the code. Fairly simple surprisingly.

FREDDY

Boss was right.

MICHEAL

Why so easy?

FREDDY

Who would want to steal drawings? Why have major security?




MICHEAL shrugs. Grips the WHEEL BOLT and SPINS it.

FREDDY

Where's the alarm guy?

MICHEAL

Boss told me when the guy was done I

should take him out. One less share.

FREDDY

Funny, he told me something

similar...




MICHEAL FREEZES. The wheel SPINS to a STOP- the vault DOOR

CLUNKS OPEN- MICHEAL GRABS for his weapon- SPINS to see FREDDY

SHOOT. FREDDY steps over MICHEAL into the vault...

INT. VAULT, JAB OFFICE -- DAY

...which is filled with an eight-foot MOUNTAINs of sketch books, laptops and hard drives.







INT. LOBBY, JAB OFFICE -- DAY

FREDDY walks into the lobby, straining under several DUFFELS

filled with DRAWINGS. He DUMPS them. Looks at JASON. LAUGHS.




FREDDY

C'mon, there's a lot to carry...

INT. LOBBY, JAB OFFICE -- DAY

JASON walks back into the lobby with two more DUFFELS. Sets

them down on an ENORMOUS PILE. FREDDY looks at it.

FREDDY

If this guy was so smart he would

have had us bring a bigger car.

FREDDY JABS his pistol in JASON's back. Takes his weapon.

FREDDY

I'm betting the boss told you to

kill me soon as we loaded the loot.

JASON

(shakes head)

No. I kill the bus driver.

FREDDY

Bus driver? What bus-

JASON steps backwards. SMASH. Hostages SCREAM as the TAIL

END OF A YELLOW SCHOOL BUS ROCKETS through the front of the

office, SLAMMING FREDDY into the window the glass siderwebs.

JASON picks up FREDDYS weapon. Another masked thug OPENS the rear

door of the bus. JASON SHOOTS him. Then loads the bags onto

the bus. The wounded STEVE_H watches him. In the

distance: SIRENS.




STEVE_H

Think you're smart, huh? Well, the

guy who hired you's just do the same

to you...

JASON tilts his head in amusement. Shakes his head.

STEVE_H

Sure he will. This town used to have respectful citizens...




JASON turns back to STEVE_H. Crouches over him.

STEVE_H

Honor. Respect. What do you

believe, huh? What do you bel-

JASON slides a GRENADE into the man's mouth. A PURPLE THREAD

is knotted around the pin.

JASON

I believe that if it makes you feel good...




JASON PULLS off his MASK. In the

reflections of the glass DEBRIS behind the Bank Manager we

see GLIMPSES of a pencil mustache and messy black hair. VON PATRICK.




VON PATRICK

...do it.




STEVE_H's eyes go wide. VON PATRICK rises, strolls

towards the bus, the purple thread attached to the grenade

pin UNRAVELLING FROM THE PURPLE LINING of his jacket as he

walks. VON PATRICK climbs into the bus, SHUTS the rear door,

TRAPPING THE PURPLE THREAD...

EXT. SCHOOL, JABVILLE -- DAY

Kids pour out, heading onto a long line of school buses.




INT. JAB OFFICE -- CONTINUOUS

As the bus pulls out, the purple thread PULLS THE PIN. Hostages

scream and scurry away from the STEVE_H, who

shakes with fear as, with a FIZZ, the grenade does not

explode, but SPEWS RED SMOKE.




EXT. JAB OFFICE -- DAY

The School Bus pulls free of the office wall and pulls out onto

the street, SLIDING INTO THE LINE OF IDENTICAL BUSES HEADING

PAST THE OFFICE. Jabville citizens run to the bank to see what all the commotion is about...but its to late...gone.

























What exactly IS VON PATRICK going to do with the drawings? Sell them for money? No...not his style...to simple...what act of appalling mischief might he commit NEXT?:devil:

This post has been edited by Von Patrick: 09 June 2010 - 01:49 AM

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Posted 09 June 2010 - 02:04 AM

Mistah J ain't gonna like this. N'ah uh. He's been eyin' that place for weeks now Patty boy. On the other hand I did enjoy yer adventure and I'm positively gigglin' with curiosity as to what's gonna happen next.
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Posted 09 June 2010 - 02:15 AM

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Posted 09 June 2010 - 02:36 AM

View PostHarley Quinn, on 08 June 2010 - 06:04 PM, said:

Mistah J ain't gonna like this. N'ah uh. He's been eyin' that place for weeks now Patty boy. On the other hand I did enjoy yer adventure and I'm positively gigglin' with curiosity as to what's gonna happen next.


*tickles yer chin*

Well maybe you oughta' forget about the pasty ol' mista J and come hang out with a guy who gets things done. :D
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Posted 11 June 2010 - 02:28 AM

Oh... dude. Steve is going to kick yer ass... Yup yup yup.

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Posted 27 January 2011 - 05:53 PM

I cannot believe this fell dead. :(
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