[Elysium Bliss]

This is the script I wrote for a fan comic I was planning to draw. I don't know when I'll get to it as far as drawing it out so I figured I'd at least post the script for all to enjoy. It's kind of a Jab character crossover. Hope you all enjoy!!!

Summer Camp Mishap


Pg: 1

Panel: 1

Dusk skyline of a major metropolitan city.

Nastasia: Georgio! The Boss warned you not to cross over into Little Italy unless you come to pay him what you owe him you stupid goomba.

Panel: 2

Georgio Spinolli groveling before Nastasia Romanova and her comrade Bullie.

Nastasia: Count yourself lucky he did not send Nickolai, or you would be dead already.
Georgio: I, I, I got something betta than money Nasta! I, I, I was just on my way to see him!
Nastasia: Better than money?

Panel: 3

Georgio pulls a crumpled piece of paper from his jacket.

Georgio: Yeah betta! Y’see? It’s a map. Belonged to some guy named Winglenut. A map to some hidden confederate treasure buried in da hills down south.
Nastasia: A mep? How much is in this… treasure you speak of?

Panel: 4

Close-up of Nastasia and a glimpse of a tiny jeweled skull embedded in her eye patch

Georgio: Dunno for sure… but rumor is over $500,000 in gold and silver, maybe more.

Pg: 2

Panel: 1

Nastasia gestures for Bullie

Georgio: This is more than enough to cover my debts. I was gonna give dis map to da Boss in trade.
Nastasia: No… No you’re not. Bullie!? Give Mr. Spinolli the treatment.
Bullie: Yes Ma’am.
Panel: 2

Extreme close-up of Georgio’s eyes open wide in fear.

Georgio: NO! Whatta ya doin!?

Panel: 3

Nastasia walking away with the map, behind her lots of stars and flash to hint of Georgio’s beating.

Georgio: You one eyed Russian… BITCH! Yeeeeaaaagh!!!

Panel: 4

Wide shot of the Harvey home.

Julia: Oh god Daddy! You feel so gooood!

Pg: 3

Panel: 1

Julia and Richard are engaged in a heated bout of sex. Close up of Julia’s ass with Richard’s cock buried inside.

Julia: I love it when you stick your big cock inside of my tight asshole daddy!
Richard: Of course princess. Seeing as you’ll be away at summer camp I figured I’d send you off with a BANG!

Panel: 2

Julia looks back at Richard with a pouting face.

Julia: Do I have to go to summer camp dad? I don’t know if I could be away from your cock for so long.
Richard: Ungh! Don’t worry honey; this will be an enriching experience for you. *Not too mention I spent a lotta money on this damn camp thing!*

Panel: 3

More sexy interplay

Richard: Just sit back and let daddy finish fucking this sweet ass of yours princess!
Julia: Mmmmmm yes please daddy, I’m so close to cumming!

Panel: 4

Richard pulls out his stiffened cock and prepares to eat away at Julia’s wet pussy.

Richard: Looks like I’ve been neglecting your cute little cunt princess. I can see it wants some attention too.
Julia: Please do daddy.

Panel: 5

Close up of Richard munching feverishly at Julia’s cunt.

Richard: Mmmmmmph!
Julia: Oh yes! Oh it feels so good!

Panel: 6

More pussy eating

Julia: I have to return the favor daddy! Give me your cock! I want it in my mouth!

Pg: 4

Panel: 1

Richard, enjoying the thought of Julia’s warm mouth around his cock gladly obliges his daughter’s request.

Richard: I’ve learned never to argue with my girls.

Panel: 2

Julia takes Richard in her mouth and sucks him to climax.

Richard: I’m cumming baby! Daddy wants to share his load with you!

Panel: 3

Richard pulls out and sprays his load into Julia’s face

Julia: Oh you taste delicious!
Richard: Yeah, yeah that feels perfect!




Panel: 4

Drenched in cum, Julia’s face suddenly reacts in surprise as she hears the honk of Natalie’s mom’s car.

Nat: JULES!?
Julia: Oh! That’s Natalie and her mom! Sorry daddy gotta go!

Panel: 5

Julia scurries about in a rush picking up tossed clothes and knick knacks. Her pussy is dripping from her climax.

Pg: 5

Panel: 1

Julia and Richard at the door of their home.

Julia: I’m going to miss you daddy, especially our father daughter time.
Richard: I know baby, I’ll miss you too. But just try and have fun. Natalie will be there, just watch out for those boys and keep that pussy of yours safe.

Panel: 2

Natalie and Julia walking away from the door, Julia waving goodbye to Richard. Natalie looks a bit stunned

Julia: Bye bye daddy! Take care of mom and junior for me!
Nat: Uhm… Jules?

Panel: 3

Julia’s face flinches in embarrassment as Natalie points out a bit of residual cum on her face.

Nat: You missed some.

Panel: 4

Wide shot of the entrance to the Holly Woods Summer Camp. A car belonging to the head counselors is seen.

Nastasia: This looks like the place on the map. But why is there a camp here? That cursed treasure has got to be around here somewhere. Always difficult things have to be. And it looks like we have company Bullie.
Pg: 6

Panel: 1

The head counselors Travis and Abbey are out by the river enjoying a picnic and sexual romp before the others arrive.

Abbey: But what if the others or the kids arrive Travis?
Travis: We got plenty of time Abbey; nobody is scheduled to arrive until later tonight. Now c’mon, let me dip into that slit of yours!

Panel: 2

Close-up of Travis pushing into Abbey.

Travis Geeeeezus you’re fucking tight!
Abbey: Oh yes fuck me baby!

Panel: 3

More sex, moaning, and goo splashing about

Panel: 4

Close-up of Bullie’s booted foot snapping twigs

Panel: 5

The two lovers look up in panic as they hear the rustling coming closer

Abbey: What was that?
Travis: I don’t know. Y’think its George and the others?

Pg: 7

Panel: 1

Bullie jumps out of the woods wearing a hockey mask, waving a chainsaw like a homicidal maniac grunting and hollering.

Panel: 2

The naked lovers jump up in absolute terror forgetting about their belongings and run off into the wilderness.

Both: HOLY SHIT!!!
Panel: 3

Nastasia follows behind Bullie patting him on the shoulder for his unique approach. She’s almost smiling.

Nastasia: You watch too many movies my friend. Now! Let us start our search for this Winglenut treasure.

Pg: 8

Panel: 1

An off-road jeep pulls into the camp grounds followed by a large roaring bus rousing up billows of dust.

George: We’re here guys.
Phillip: (Condescending) We can see that George.

Panel: 2

Nastasia and Bullie react to the rumble of the bus and the screaming of the campers

Nastasia: Now what?

Panel: 3

Everyone is unloading from the bus in a mild rush of chaos, as the crew from the jeep keeps watch, most noticeably are some of the Wrong House crew. George, WH Girl, Phillip, and Rico followed by Noreen

Pg: 9

Panel: 1

Wong and Sharona step out of the bus with Wong struggling to carry Sharona’s baggage

Sharona: Wow Wong! I’m glad you talked me into coming… this place is beautiful.
Wong: What did… ungh… you put in this thing?
Sharona: Just the essentials.
Wong: Essentially… ungh… everything?

Panel: 2

Nat and Julia arrive thanks to Natalie’s mom. Julia seems overcome by the natural beauty of the campgrounds as Natalie bids her mother farewell.

Nat: Thanks mom! We’ll see you in a few weeks!

Panel: 3

The girls already notice the abundance of cute guys at the camp and are especially taken aback by one glorious god… Rico

Nat: Lookit all the cute guys around here Julia. This might be more fun than we first thought.
Julia: Oh I know, especially that one over there. He’s hot!

Panel: 4

The glorious Rico. Himself scouting all of the girls he intends to conquer.

Rico: Mmmmmmm.

Pg: 10

Panel: 1

Luke is carefully treading the branch of a tree, something has caught his attention and he’s trying desperately to get a better vantage point.

Luke: *I knews comin’ out har was a good way t’uh waste the day. Nows I gets a show too.*

Panel: 2

Rita Mae is below, pleasuring herself with a freshly husked cob of corn. Luke can be seen in the tree just barely in the corner of the panel.

Rita Mae: Ooooh! I luvs me a picnic. Nuthin’ like enjoyin’ muh’self. Oooooh!

Panel: 3

Back to Luke in the tree only this time he’s joined by our squirrelly friend, curious at what this troublemaker is doing.

Luke: *Now that’s how’s I wunt’s m’ah curn buttered frum now on! Mmmm. D’ehlishus!*

Panel: 4

Squirrel gets annoyed and apparently leaves



Pg: 11

Panel: 1

Close-up of Rita Mae’s cunt getting serviced by the dripping wet corn

Rita Mae: This fells s’uh gooooood!

Panel: 2

The squirrel returns with a pine cone.

Panel: 3

Luke salivating at his cousin’s self indulgence.

Luke: *Thas right Rita Mae, y’uh shuck that curn ins to yo pusseh!*

Panel: 4

Back view of the squirrel and Luke as the furry creature begins to charge with the pine cone towards Luke’s back end.

Panel: 5

Over exaggerated wildtake of Luke as he experiences something mighty painful.

Luke: CRICKET SPIT!!!

Pg: 12

Panel: 1

Wide shot of Luke and Rita Mae with Luke looking pointing at the corn still inside his cousin and Rita Mae more than a little upset

Rita Mae: LUKE! Y’uh pervert!
Luke: Y’uhs gunna finish that?

Panel: 2

Both hear the laughter and cheering of people nearby. Luke is too busy nibbling at his specially glazed corn to care.

Rita Mae: Y’uh her that? What’s with all that ruckus?

Panel: 3

Grabbing Luke both begin to make their way closer to the ruckus.

Rita Mae: C’mun Luke!

Pg: 13

Panel: 1

Julia inspects the crowd. Noreen is behind her and surprised to see her

Noreen: Julia?
Julia: Noreen? Hi! Are you one of the counselors?

Panel: 2

Noreen looking a little irritated as she remembers her past

Noreen: Sure am. How’s your mother doing?


Panel: 3

Curious, George looks around for his friend Travis. WH Girl is beside him trying to keep him relaxed.

George: I wonder where Travis and Abbey are. Their car is here.
WH Girl: Oooh maybe they’re doing it out by the river!

Panel: 4

Nastasia and Bullie walk towards the group

Nastasia: Nyet! You must all leave!
George: You’re not Travis and Abbey. Where are the head counselors?

Panel: 5

Nastasia looks taken aback.

Nastasia: We are… we are… replacements. Travis and Abbey were uhm… sick with terrible flu. This is comrade Bullie.



Panel: 6

Rico rushes up to Nastasia taking her hand

Rico: It is a pleasure for you to meet Rico I’m sure. If you are good to Rico, Rico will take you to untold levels of pleasure my one eyed lovely?
Nastasia: I am ex KGB trainer. Can you tolerate untold levels of pain?

Pg: 14

Panel: 1

Julia and Nat gossip about Noreen

Julia: That was awkward. Noreen gave me the third degree about mom for some unknown reason.
Nat: Forget about it.
Jake: Julia!?

Panel: 2

Julia is shocked and surprised to see Jake and Andy, the boys from the tree house approaching her.

Jake: It is you! You remember Andy.
Julia: Jake, Andy! You’re here too!? This is going to be a fun few weeks indeed!

Panel: 3

George, WH girl, Noreen, Rico, and Phillip grouped together

WH Girl: We can’t leave, the buses have already left and we don’t have a way to get back to the city.
Noreen: Yeah, you got some reason for wanting us and all the campers to be going?

Panel: 4

Nastasia is getting frustrated with what she feels is an interrogation

Nastasia: You cannot stay here because… because… because we have no nurse. We need nurse. No nurse, no camp!

Pg: 15

Panel: 1

Noreen starts walking towards her Jeep. George is gasping from disbelief.

Noreen: Screw this shit I’m outta here!
George: What!?

Panel: 2

Phillip looking back at Noreen figures she’s right and tries to persuade the others to bail.

Phillip: Look guys, it’s obvious we’re not wanted here! Let’s bail and enjoy the rest of our summer
WH Girl: But what about the camp kids, what about their summer?

Panel: 3

Phillip tries to appeal to Rico

Phillip: C’mon Rico, last chance to get the hell out of here.
Rico: Leave if you must but leave Rico be. Rico has an agenda he must finish.

Panel: 4

George, Rico, and WH Girl watch as the two other counselors begin to leave. Yelling ensues.

WH Girl: You two are disgusting!
Noreen: What are we supposed to do? We have no fucking nurse!

Pg: 16

Panel: 1

Nurse Stacy fully dressed in her Nurse uniform, is giving head to some stranger as they whiz through the winding back hill roads.

Stranger: Oh fuck yeah Stacy! You give a fucking amazing blowjob! Suck that cock!
Stacy: Mmmm!


Panel: 2

Close up of Stacy. Her mouth is messy with juices flowing down the shaft of the strangers cock.

Stacy: Mmmm gmmph!
Stranger: Don’t talk just suck, we’re almost there babe!

Panel: 3

The stranger jizzes all over our Nurses’ face leaving quite the sticky mess. It’s an eruption of massive proportions and pleasure.

Stranger: Oh, oh!

Panel: 4

The car blurs by.

Stranger: OH GOD!!!

Pg: 17

Panel: 1

Wide shot of the car pulling up to the front of the summer camp. Stacy wipes herself clean.

Stranger: Just like I promised ya babe. I’d bring you to Hollywood if you sucked my dick.
Stacy: But this doesn’t look like Hollywood to me.

Panel: 2

A confused Stacy looks up at the Holly woods Summer camp sign.

Stacy: Uhmmmm… I guess you’re right! There’s the Hollywood sign right there, duh!

Panel: 3

As Stacy grabs her small suitcase and makes her way out of the car the stranger vroooms out of panel leaving Stacy behind despite knowing full well he played her for a fool

Stranger: Gotta goooooooooo!




Pg: 18

Panel: 1

Rico eyes the approaching Nurse as if he had a built in babe radar.

Rico: *Mmmm, have you come to submit to Rico’s machismo?*

Panel: 2

Nurse Stacy is greeted by George and WH Girl and a very sly looking Rico. He definitely wants to conquer this prize

WH Girl: Oh thank goodness, you must be the nurse.
Stacy: Uhm sure… I play one on TV. (Giggles)

Panel: 3

The group laughs

George: Ha! Ha! Ha! T.V. that’s hilarious, she even has a sense of humor!

Panel: 4

Rico stares at Stacy’s chest. POV from behind Rico’s head.

Rico: Rico thinks that’s not all she has.

Panel: 5

George, WH Girl, Rico, and Stacy grouped together appealing to Nastasia a bit triumphantly.

WH Girl: Well? The camp has its nurse, and we’re good to go!

Panel: 6

Nastasia knowing she is momentarily defeated looks on in disgust.

Nastasia: Chyort voz'mi!






Pg: 19

Panel: 1

Rita Mae and Luke hiding in the nearby bushes. Luke is finishing up his corn almost oblivious to what’s happening around him.

Rita Mae: Will ya look at all dem cute fellas Luke?
Luke: Hmmm?

Panel: 2

Rita Mae starts daydreaming. Her face is lost in wondrous images as she unknowingly begins touching herself.

Rita Mae: I wunders if pa will let me go t’uh this har camp thingy?
Luke: Neh ya know Rita Mae, campin izza man’s thing!

Panel: 3

Rita Mae a little perturbed by Luke’s comments points a wet finger at him.

Rita Mae: Then explains t’uh me why thar’s girls over at dis har camp?
Luke: GIRLS!?

Panel: 4

Close-up of Luke’s face with his tongue flapping and his chops drooling.

Luke: I wunders if pa will let me go t’uh this har camp thingy?

Pg: 20

Panel: 1

Nastasia and Bullie have slipped away from the group and are contemplating their next move.

Nastasia: There are far too many kids here to get away with the treasure unnoticed. Unless…

Panel: 2

Nastasia is looking particularly nasty and evil.

Nastasia: We run them ragged. Work them to the point of exhaustion. Get them to want to leave.

Panel: 3

Nastia in the foreground almost completely covered in shadow with Bullie behind her with an expression of dumbfounded ness.

Bullie: But what if it doesn’t work Nastia?
Nastasia: We kill them… all of them.

Panel: 4

Nastasia cuddles Bullie’s arm and pouts.

Nastasia: I am horny; let us get these American brats settled in so we can play.

Pg: 21

Panel: 1

Wide panel shot of Georgio trapped in a cast from head to toe; only his eyes and mouth are seen. He has visitors. The Boss and Nickolai.

The Boss: Tell me this again Georgio, and don’t leave anything out do you understand?
Georgio: Y, yes sir. Nastia and her meathead Bullie attacked me! Dey took dis map I was plannin’ to give to ya. Supposed to be worth at least five hundred grand!

Panel: 2

Close up of the Boss’ eyes, seething with anger at Nastia’s betrayal.

The Boss: You wouldn’t happen to know where this treasure is would you?
Georgio: Someplace… somewhere near that Holly woods Summer camp.

Panel: 3

The Boss with Nickolai behind him

The Boss: Nickolai? Get a group together. Send them to this camp. Tell them to bring me that treasure, and Nastia’s head. Don’t let anyone stand in their way.

To be continued…

[Telgar]

Looks awsome, definatly makes me wish I could draw better than I do. Also gives me ideas of my own. hehehe. A Jab Character and Jab Avitar Crossover, IE us and them. Again great script and I hope someone desides to draw it, it sounds HOT!!

[Erikon]

WOW! Blissy, you amaze me not only with your spectacular art, but your amazing skills at writing too! I can totally see this happening in a Jab comic because you captured our beloved characters so well! Just absolutely wonderful work!

[Elysium Bliss]

Thanks Telgar and Erikon. I might continue writing the second chapter if some of you think it's deserving!!!

[Telgar]

Elysium_Bliss, on 16 April 2010 - 10:42 AM, said:

Thanks Telgar and Erikon. I might continue writing the second chapter if some of you think it's deserving!!!

It is very much deserving.

[Sickpuppy]

I've been doing some catching up this morning, Bliss this is terrific. I could see each panel (as I imagine it) in your style as well, this would be grand to see it come to life.

[Elysium Bliss]

Sickpuppy, on 23 April 2010 - 06:32 AM, said:

I've been doing some catching up this morning, Bliss this is terrific. I could see each panel (as I imagine it) in your style as well, this would be grand to see it come to life.

Thanks Puppy. Seeing as how we have an audience for it I think I will get to writing the second chapter after my next couple of projects!!!

[rewind83709]

Very cute, very funny, a pretty big cross-over, I mean you have everyone. Im wondering were you planny on including Wong and Sharona? I mean it is summer camp, so why not have well everyone? I would love t see this done, but I doubt that Jab would do it, o maybe he would, it would mean just working on one comic. Who knows, it could be pretty cool.

[Elysium Bliss]

Wong and Sharona were in it briefly. they'll play a bigger role in the next segment. The characters have to feel they serve a purpose in the story and rather than just faking some extended bs scene with Wong and Sharona I felt introducing them and keeping their dialogue brief at this point better served the flow of the story!!!

[jaded_blue]

Elysium_Bliss, on 16 April 2010 - 10:42 AM, said:

Thanks Telgar and Erikon. I might continue writing the second chapter if some of you think it's deserving!!!

Please do. Very entertaining... ya dirty bitch.